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Posted in: Acceptance
  machievelli
12-29-2005, 12:31 PM
#13
Learning The next weeks were both frustrating and exhilarating to the girl. She learned to direct the force, to leap twice her height from a flat footed stance. To run all day through a course mixing distance and height jumps that would have tired he...  [Read More]
Posted in: Acceptance
  machievelli
12-13-2005, 12:40 AM
#12
Go back and reread the second section. While i had written it, the dining hall sequence didn't ring true. I figured it out, and fixed it. You see, just because you HAVE the force, doesn't mean you need it to FIX something...  [Read More]
Posted in: Acceptance
  machievelli
12-12-2005, 1:53 AM
#9
The Academy The ancient Massassi temple hulked in the depths of it’s clearing. The only sign of life was a single person sitting in a tailor’s seat on the pinnacle. She breathed in deeply, meditating. Mara Jade had what might be called a checker...  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
01-28-2006, 1:47 PM
#120
Suggestion Only! When I look on StarWarsKnights.com, I noticed you keep chaning the tittle. When the mods are reported, they use the same tittle: 'Weekly Mod Reports'. Did you ever think of using a title that is consistant each time you report? For...  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
01-23-2006, 10:53 AM
#115
Mac, if I had a week, I could post every nasty reply I sent just in the last year because I was tired. No biggie...  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
01-22-2006, 1:22 AM
#113
Mac, I am doing as I was asked. When I was younger, I had people who read my stuff but weren't willing to complain about it because 'hey, I'm your friend, and and I don't want to hurt your feelings'. When I briefly taught a class on creative writing...  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
01-20-2006, 11:59 AM
#108
I still haven't figured out hyperlinking. The word processor in my computer refuses to accept that there is such a thing and sulks when I try to install it. My week was rather rushed with MLK day and my wife's tirade after getting her teeth fixed. I...  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
01-16-2006, 12:21 PM
#107
If you actually read my segment Acceptance, you will notice that I rewrote the scene in the mess hall because the way I worded it originally, I suggested that she had to become a master of the force itself, rather than what I had meant, which is that...  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
01-15-2006, 11:31 AM
#100
Ohhh reviews. Good to see some reviews, but I think your spelling is going down. ;) Remember what I tell you guys about spelling checks and editing? Mea maxima culpa...  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
01-13-2006, 10:11 AM
#97
13 January 2006 STAR WARS: Shadows Of The Past BlackReflection http://www.lucasforums.com/showthread.php?t=157306 A Jedi needing to get his life straight is given an important mission The biggest problem this little Dane has is that he is fumbling...  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
01-13-2006, 10:07 AM
#96
Alkonium, If you have read the Lord of the Rings Trilogy, you know that Two towers is only a continuation of Fellowship of the ring. A sequel. that is what I meant. If an apology for my semantics is in order, I apologize....  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
01-06-2006, 11:30 AM
#91
6 January 2006 Just an aside; Did you know that this column has gotten more views in this forum than all of my posted fiction combined? Now I'm depressed. Darth Sion: A legacy of Pain. http://www.lucasforums.com/showthread.php?t=157206 DarthSion101...  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
12-31-2005, 7:10 PM
#90
Sabretooth, ask my wife. I'm ALWAYS critical....  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
12-30-2005, 11:20 AM
#84
Sorry I am a little late delivering the goods. Between Christmas, My anniversary (Which I remember and my wife forgets, go figure) and prepping for New Years, I have had a full dance card. But you guys make it worth while. Okay First Fanfic (Untitle...  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
12-27-2005, 1:12 PM
#81
I don't think I actually have a job here, Hallucination. I'm just the critic for Starwarsknight.com. Unless they make me a staff member, I don't work here....  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
12-27-2005, 10:27 AM
#79
By my estimate JD, two more weeks. Sorry....  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
12-27-2005, 10:26 AM
#78
Let me know, Sabre. Every writer has things they repeat ad nauseum. Don Pendleton in the Executioner series, Clive cussler with his last half dozen bookswhere he just had to inject a character of the same name. When it's just words, try a thesaurus....  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
12-26-2005, 12:41 AM
#75
How much do you know about history, kid? England was our mortal enemy through two wars, and a bosom budy from then on. Germany the same. Russia was friend, enemy, then friend again. Considering when you have set it, a limited amount of working togeth...  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
12-24-2005, 12:25 PM
#73
Actually, Triumph of the Republic isn't actually done yet, so could you wait until it is before reviewing it? Let me know, and I will read it all and review it again if you want. As for FFWM12, I apologize for changing her gender in my review. I ha...  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
12-23-2005, 1:26 AM
#66
I am posting a little early so I can start my Yule celebration. Those who are going to be reviewed next should be warned that I will probably have a hangover next week. That isn't true, I never have hangovers. But hey, it's a good excuse. 24 Decembe...  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
12-16-2005, 10:55 PM
#63
Alkonium, I'll make a deal with you. I'll review you again next month. Check out the comment I PMed you. Force, Edit, edit, edit....  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
12-16-2005, 12:17 PM
#60
16 Dec Rescue from Mustafar Alkonium http://www.lucasforums.com/showthread.php?t=155005 65 Years after the Battle of Yavin, Three Jedi face the legendary HK47 The action is fast and furious, which is good, but the author is compressing it, making...  [Read More]
Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents
  machievelli
12-12-2005, 12:09 PM
#55
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRGGGGGGGGGGGGG GGGHHHHHHHHH!...  [Read More]
Posted in: [Fanfic] The Plight of Darkness
  machievelli
12-13-2005, 1:33 AM
#151
You can get my e-mail from my member page. Send it on, it's the only way I'll get to read all of it....  [Read More]
Posted in: [Fanfic] The Plight of Darkness
  machievelli
12-12-2005, 1:57 PM
#149
I finally wrote your review kid. If you want it cleaned up, edited, etc, send me a copy of the entire thing and I will....  [Read More]
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