JediMaster12

12-30-2006, 9:28 PM
#722

Welcome to the newbies. I have to say that you have to watch out for ED for he can be a thread killer if you let him :xp: Follow certain pieces of advice but I will say this: contrary to the outrageous rumors from ED, Jae is actually a nice gal. ED:... [Read More]

Posted in: Ways To Get Your Fic Noticed?

JediMaster12

01-08-2007, 2:26 PM
#43

Personally I get surprised when anyone reads my ramblings at all because the fiction prose world is something that I have not treaded very long. Yeah I wrote a few short stories in school but I always thought there were better ones. Poetry was more t... [Read More]

Posted in: [Other]Holiday Diddies

JediMaster12

12-15-2006, 2:59 PM
#12

CSI: Diddy is a word I use to refer to a song that has had their original lyrics changed to talk of something else. Wierd Al Yankovic is a master with my favorite being Living with a Hernia and Yoda. The object is to try an make something funny out o... [Read More]

Posted in: [Short Fic] Silence and Darkness

JediMaster12

01-08-2007, 1:55 PM
#8

Very mysterious and yet you can sense betrayal, anger, angst, the emotions that come with love among other things. The battle scene was very descriptive. It had me cringing thinking of bone snapping and the agony it must bring. Well done.... [Read More]

Posted in: [NSW Poetry] Blessings of the Written Word

JediMaster12

01-08-2007, 2:04 PM
#50

Darling Cygnus, I have been busy this holiday season. I do have another poem that was inspired by WWI and trench war fare. I wrote it after reading All's Quiet on the Western Front. I loved yours as well, even your ramblings. Emalin: That was sweet... [Read More]

Posted in: [NSW Poetry] Blessings of the Written Word

JediMaster12

12-28-2006, 1:30 AM
#41

Cygnus darling that is beautiful. I can almost se the colors made of the setting sun, or is it the rising sun? Somehow I get the impression that you are writing to me. Anyway in response to that I have another poem that I wrote. This is based upon th... [Read More]

Posted in: [RP Thread]Knightfall: A Duel Between Light and Dark?

JediMaster12

12-20-2006, 5:07 PM
#241

Kirabaros will never fall. He will always be there trying to fight the darkness. CSI won't fall because if he does then I will kick his butt :)... [Read More]

Posted in: [RP Thread]Knightfall: A Duel Between Light and Dark?

JediMaster12

12-14-2006, 1:39 AM
#229

Kirabaros heard the cave in and struggled to help lift the boulders up. He sensed the assassin before CSI called to him through the Force. She carried a familiar presence. He turned to face Viera who was staring at him with malice. He stood and cocke... [Read More]

Posted in: [Short Fic] [AU] Darth Bastila - Power of the Dark Lady

JediMaster12

01-08-2007, 1:47 PM
#18

This is an interesting take and raises the what if in people. It feels slightly rushed but you compensated for that with line breaks. Good flow and you brought out Bastila's character well when she turned to the darkside.... [Read More]

Posted in: [FIC]Heart of Deception

JediMaster12

01-08-2007, 6:48 PM
#162

Well here it is another chapter. I know it's a long story but when you have many subplots coming together it takes up a lot of space. To hold the suspense, it contains the answer to igyman's questions about the Blood King and maybe a few predictions... [Read More]

Posted in: [FIC]Heart of Deception

JediMaster12

01-05-2007, 1:22 AM
#161

Thanks for the comments guys. The emphasis on the traits is what was going through my mind on how AValonians should be. They are the kind of people that can inspect a situation and the are not the kind to back down easily. These traits are actually... [Read More]

Posted in: [FIC]Heart of Deception

JediMaster12

01-02-2007, 10:35 PM
#158

Thanks for the comments. I was trying to show the friendship that Kirabaros has with Atton. It becomes important for later adventures after this fic. I just wanted to point out that the rice being thrown into the water is an old Japanese custom. It w... [Read More]

Posted in: [FIC]Heart of Deception

JediMaster12

01-01-2007, 12:03 PM
#154

Thanks guys. I hope you caught the slight attraction that my newest character feels for my resident scoundrel. The next chapter I will come out and say that it was inspired by the movie Rocky III and the scene that discusses fear. It is particularly... [Read More]

Posted in: [FIC]Heart of Deception

JediMaster12

12-30-2006, 9:07 PM
#150

igyman: Well that's good news. Glad you liked it. I admit that I found a block in which I was able to beat down but that is with Chapter 37. I had to rewrite part of the chapter because I have plans for some new characters. For everyone: A new chapt... [Read More]

Posted in: [FIC]Heart of Deception

JediMaster12

12-28-2006, 2:29 AM
#147

Yes of course. I felt it important to give him more of a role in this tale since he grew closer to Revan after Lilah was born. BTW I am working on a shortie concerning that but that's for another time. CSI: Dustil is mentioned several times in the ea... [Read More]

Posted in: [FIC]Heart of Deception

JediMaster12

12-28-2006, 1:18 AM
#145

igyman: I won't spoil anything but I will post another chapter for you guys. I will warn you that my later chapters may appear long and drawn out but I wasn't satisfied that I wrapped up everything and I needed some downtime somewhere. Without furt... [Read More]

Posted in: [FIC]Heart of Deception

JediMaster12

12-26-2006, 1:28 PM
#143

I know that Pottsie. I'm just giving credit where credit is due. Some of my touching scenes were inspired by other films. As to the font that my fics are in, that is size 1. The quote from The Return of Kirabaros is just bold. That is why it appears... [Read More]

Posted in: [FIC]Heart of Deception

JediMaster12

12-26-2006, 1:07 PM
#141

Long at last, here is a new chapter for the holidays. This one is where HK makes a rescue with my favorite cryptic meatbag. My aplogies but I used a famous Jedi's quote from ANH and the scene is reminescent of the Leviathan. Chapter 32 They say that... [Read More]

Posted in: [FIC]Heart of Deception

JediMaster12

12-15-2006, 3:04 PM
#140

You forgot igyman that I made mention of recognition several times before. Of course Jaqrand would know Atton since Atton used to be his boss. That face off with the detonator and the like, the scene setting and some of the dialogue come from my fa... [Read More]

Posted in: [FIC]Heart of Deception

JediMaster12

12-14-2006, 1:30 AM
#137

You sound a bit like Pottsie but I am glad that you like my style. You should read Heart of the Guardian, CSI. It gives a better background on certain things and some of my shorties give background on Atton and little Morgan and Revan and Lilah. That... [Read More]

Posted in: [Shortie Fic] Rule Number One

JediMaster12

01-08-2007, 1:40 PM
#14

Nice shortie. The moral: Don't lose your lightsaber. Good job Doc. You placed Bastila in a tense situation and you came through with the eventual capture by Brejik's men. You had good flow.... [Read More]

Posted in: [Fic] Star Wars: Assassination Protocols

JediMaster12

12-22-2006, 1:05 PM
#114

Wow. I'm off for a few days and RC comes out of the blue with a holiday treat: two chapters. Your flow is very good though I am in agreement with you on eleven being a bit fast paced. I suggest watching movies with gun fights and the like. Gives idea... [Read More]

Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents

JediMaster12

01-05-2007, 9:52 PM
#547

Oh a stickler are you mach? Still I think most of us are in agreement that you give splendid reviews and from your selections I have read a few and found them delightful. Congrats to everyone who received a review.... [Read More]

Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents

JediMaster12

12-22-2006, 2:00 PM
#527

Thanks mach for the review. That was one of my more challenging pieces seeing as I was never truly satisfied with how Atton's nature was dealt with in the game by the female Exile. I decided to spread my wings and be a little creative. In so doing, I... [Read More]

Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents

JediMaster12

12-15-2006, 4:13 PM
#517

Yes it is an honor CSI. Thanks mach. It was my intention to use the scene from the Mummy. It is slightly differently from the edition on KFM. I know I had some problems with word usage and didn't think about it. Hey, that's an author's lot: to const... [Read More]

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