Coruscant Entertainment Center (
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KOTOR III: The Wrath of War (
http://www.lucasforums.com/showthread.php?t=163197)
Tysyacha
14 years after KOTOR II a Team led by Bastila and Canderous search for Revan.
Told from the viewpoint of the youngest member of the team.
The style is abrupt, and it looks more like a synopsis than a story. If it is not it has to be expanded, and tweaked. If it is a synopsis, the style is a little wordy.
Birth of Darth Hansen (
http://www.lucasforums.com/showthread.php?t=163904)
Darth Hansen
Set after KOTOR I. A Padawan becomes a Sith.
Talk about abrupt! What I estimate would have been four pages slammed into a single paragraph. I don’t know where to begin.
First, conversation breaks. It is considered proper to create a new paragraph every time you have a new speaker.
A standard paragraph is considered five sentences. Of course the person that created that model assumes a simple business type discussion. In fiction I have seen much longer ones and couldn’t see a way to make the ‘graph’ shorter. The standard accepted measure is the idea. Once the specific idea is exhausted, you stop.
The action what I could glean of it, was standard, and acceptable.
Shadows and Twilight (
http://www.lucasforums.com/showthread.php?t=163312)
DarthSion101
In the Interim between KOTOR I and II. As Revan searches, he has recurring nightmares of what might happen...
The is DS’s second work, and while short is better than the first. You get the feeling of foreboding in the character clearly. It is short, and that is my primary complaint
http://www.galacticsenate.com/index.php?showforum=27&prune_day=100&sort_by=Z-A&sort_key=last_post&topicfilter=all&st=50]The) Galactic Senate Coruscant theater
Star Wars: Letters from the Front (
http://www.galacticsenate.com/index.php?showtopic=10097)
Darth Badman
A planned series of letters spanning the Clone wars and the Rebellion.
This is the fifth time I have reviewed DB, and this is the one place where his problem with creating paragraphs is actually a help. Letters hastily written by a boy on the battlefield is a staple of history, giving the reader a mere taste of what someone they care about is going through and no parent ever sent it back corrected and graded.
He only has two letters, both from soldiers on Yavin, both set during SW: A New Hope. A pity; I hoped for more.
Changing the ANH to tie into the PT (satire), (
http://www.galacticsenate.com/index.php?showtopic=15385)
jawaewokgungan
Yet another wacky parody.
As a writer, I noticed, as have others, continuity breaks. Not major ones, but large enough if you see them. The author went back, remembering all of what happened in Phantom Menace, and rewrote A New Hope. A very funny read, since his main standard tagline throughout is;
CUT TO: Luke is attacked by sand people. Obi-Wan rescues him. He sees R2-D2 hiding.
BEN: Hello there! Come here my little friend.
R2: Bleep-beep!
BEN: (shocked) R2-D2? I can’t believe it. Long time no see.
R2: Beep!
BEN: What do you mean I haven’t aged well?
Connecting TESB & ROTJ to the prequels (satre) (
http://www.galacticsenate.com/index.php?showtopic=15390)
jawaewokgungan
The third parody;
This is the third review of the authors work, and it is just as silly as the others.
The author took The Empire Strikes Back, and Return of the Jedi, clumped them together, added everything you might have remembered from the new Trilogy, and shook well. There is always some scene in these works that tickles me;
YODA: You are reckless!
BEN'S VOICE: So was I, if you'll remember.
YODA: Hmmm. Again, I don’t think so. Incompetent, maybe. Reckless, no.
http://www.kotorfanmedia.com/?cat=6&paged=15]kotorfanmedia)
Source of Origin: Chapter I (
http://www.kotorfanmedia.com/?p=1386)
siempre
The events aboard Endar Spire from a drunken Revan’s point of view.
The style is crisp and clean, the story well done, the combat scenes the flashing images you would expect from someone not tracking too well. This is siempre’s second review, and it is the best I have seen from the author so far.
Could You Really? (
http://www.kotorfanmedia.com/?p=1435)
JediDWH
During the battle aboard Leviathan; What went through Carth’s mind?
This is JediDWH’s second appearance in these pages, and like the first, it is a well done work. The interplay within someone’s mind is easy to do. All you need to do is write down every thought and memory it invokes. JediDWH does it here with Carth trying to reconcile Revan with who he sees. When done well, it is outstanding reading.
Red Vengeance - Interlude One: Repression (
http://www.kotorfanmedia.com/?p=1437)
scythe404
When Revan returns during KOTOR II, things aren’t as they were.
Part of me wanted to slap Carth myself reading this. I am willing to bet Carth distanced himself from his late wife before leaving for the same reason, but turnabout is not fair play obviously. Revan comes across tragically as someone so desperate to keep her love, that she will deny it. A very angst filled read. This is sythe404’s second appearance.