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[Fanfic] The Plight of Darkness

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 ForceFightWMe12
01-25-2006, 11:38 PM
#201
Muwahahaha! Victory is mine! Die you evil Writter's Block!!!

Sorry you had to see that :xp: but guess what? I've finished! Lemme repeat that:

I'VE FINISHED! :D

Alright, it's a little shorter, and I took a slightly more comic approach towards the end here, but...enough of my babbling. On with the show! Oh, and if the dialouge sucks, not my fault, you pushy pushy fans...:xp:

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---Chapter Thirteen---


“C’mon, you have to know something about it!”
“Ruins? No, I’m sorry. I haven’t been below the surface in years.”
“Well you must have heard something from all the spacers that pass through here!”
“Look, Offworlder, I am an antiques dealer, I deal with items that come to me, not the other way around. I’m sorry but I know nothing about this.”
“Alright, sorry we bothered you then.”
Elron and Visas exited the Manaan antiques shop, into the bright sunlight. Fairly frustrated, the Exile walked to the barrier at the edge of the courtyard, staring out over the waves. Visas joined him and for a few moments, they watched silently as waves lapped up against the metal.
“What is it about the Handmaiden?”
Elron turned to the Miraluka, who refused to make eye contact. “What?”
“Why is she so special to you? What is it about her?” the Jedi asked, picking distractedly at her gloves.
“Oh…Visas…” he took her wrist, “Look…”
“Exile? Exile, come in.”
Elron gave an exasperated sigh, and released Visas. He looked back out across the water, pulling the comm. from his belt.
“Exile here.” he said, an annoyed edge slipping into his voice.
“It’s Revan. Any luck?”
“None so far. Just a few grumpy Fish-people. Not much else. You?”
“Pretty much the same here. We’re about to head into the Courts.”
“Alright, but we’re beginning to run out of places to check around here.”
“Rendezvous at the Ebon Hawk at 1600 hours. We’ll talk more then.”
“Understood. Exile out.”
More than ready to chuck the tiny bit of metal and circuits into the sea, Elron reattached it to his belt.
“Well, we had better…” he turned to where Visas…used to be standing beside him. The Miraluka was gone. Huh? She was right there a second ago… he thought, casting about for her.

~*~*~

“Understood. Exile out.”
“Manaan doesn’t like to give up its secrets, does it?” Carth said, shaking his head.
“Apparently not.” Bastila answered.
Revan sighed. “One of the most beautiful planets I have ever seen…and the most annoying. C’mon, let’s go see what the Ahto Courts have for us.”

~*~*~

“Let the records show that Judges Shelkar,”
“Jhosa,”
“Naleshekan,”
“Kota,”
“And Duula,”
“Have found the defendant guilty on all charges, and shall be sentenced to three years in the Ahto Rehabilitation Centre--”
“B-but you’re Honors--”
“Your time to speak is over, Killian. The sentencing stands. Bring in the next plaintiffs.”
Revan and his companions sauntered into the Ahto Courts just as the defendant, Killian apparently, was escorted out by two Selkath bailiffs.
“What is the case that you bring to us?” the Selkath in the center, Shelkar, asked them.
“The case of a set of missing ruins and a civilization that seems to have disappeared.” Revan said, a cocky smile flitting across his face.
Each of the judges looked closer at him at the sound of his voice. Their dark, filmy eyes traveled over Carth and Bastila, as well.
“I know you, Offworlder.” Jhosa commented.
“Yes…has Revan truly returned to Manaan?” Shelkar asked in wonder.
“I have.” the Knight replied, proceeding to stand before the judges. “And I was wondering if you could help me with a problem.”
“After what you did for us…” Naleshekan began.
“Saving the Harakart Rift and our ancestors…”
“As well as helping us to root out the Sith lies during the War…”
“We’d do anything within our power and right to help you.”
Each of the judges spoke in turn, however, Duula stayed silent.
“I’m looking for a system of ruins, thousands upon thousands of years old that could be hidden somewhere on Manaan’s surface. Even older than the ones we found in the Harakart Rift.”
“Ruins?” Kota asked.
“Yeah, anything with inscriptions that may look like…this.” Revan said, pulling up one of the files he had copied onto his datapad from a holocron back in the temple.
“Actually…” Shelkar began. He looked down at a computer screen built into his desk. A picture of a hunk of stone with smudgy writings craved onto it came up on the screen, a box below it running runes similar to the ones glowing on Revan’s datapad. “This…was found by one of our exploration teams at the lip of the Harakart rift. We believe it was forced up out of the Rift by the tides. We haven’t had a chance to date it yet, however.”
“Can you get us a transport to the spot where it was found?” Carth asked anxiously. This had been the first hit they’d had all day.
“We can do better than that.” Jhosa said. “I am head of Ahto City’s research society. I can have a submersible and a guide prepared for your use immediately.”
Revan grinned, one of the few times he had in a very long time. “That would work just nicely.” he said.
“Very well,” the Selkath said, punching a command on his console, “A sub will be prepared for you at the Republic docking bays in a few moments. Considering it was the way that you descended last time, I trust you know where those are?”

~*~*~

“Exile? Atton?”
“Here.”
“Yeah?”
“Guess what, boys? We’re taking a fabulous vacation to the Harakart Rift!”
“I take it you got a hit?”
“Indeed I did.”
“You owe me twenty credits, Atton.”
“Damn!”
“Alright, well, keep in touch, guys. We might be out of comm. reach, depending on how deep we go into the Rift.”
“Understood.”
“Got it.”
Revan switched off the comm., flipping the small device in his hand before returning it to his belt.
“Well, you seem happy.” Bastila said, a smile playing across her lips.
The Knight rounded on her, grabbing her in a bear-hug and spinning round before planting her on the ground again. “Happy? I just got some of the best news yet! I think happy is an understatement.”
“Energetic too.” Carth chuckled.
“Hey, if we weren’t in a street full of Selkath, I’d do a cartwheel, alright?”

~*~*~

Within the span of ten minutes, Revan, Bastila, and Carth were in the submersible Jhosa had reserved for them, a Selkath guide ready to dive in along side them and guide them to the area where the tablet was found. The Sub had three different cockpits, each with their own separate air bubble. Each leapt into their respective seats, closed off their cockpits, and Revan started the engines. The roar of rushing water filled the sub as the little durasteel vehicle sank beneath the waves.

~*~*~

“Down once more to the dungeon of my black despair!”
“Revan!”
“Down we plunge to the prison of my mind!”
“I didn’t know he could sing, heheh!”
“By the Force, you should hear him when he’s in the shower!”
“I’m not sure I like the way that sounds, Bastila, ahaha!”
“Carth--”
“Down that path into darkness deep as--”
“Revan, if we weren’t in separate cockpits, I’d hit you.”

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 Hallucination
01-25-2006, 11:39 PM
#202
I'm working on it, I'm working on it...though this block of mine is like trying to ride a bike through a swamp...not that i've tried...
Forcefight, you're the best writer here, and you have plenty of fans around here, but sometimes I think you write as slow as a herd of turtles stampeding through peanut butter.;)

Enjoy your writing, and don't do drugs (alliterations FTW!).

Edit: You did that on purpose didn't you? :D. Good chapter.
 ForceFightWMe12
01-25-2006, 11:41 PM
#203
On purpose? My, whatever would you mean? :xp:
 Hallucination
01-25-2006, 11:49 PM
#204
On purpose? My, whatever would you mean? :xp:
Not the tongue-sticking out smilie, that'll give me cancer of the right nebular!:xp:
We all know you like posting things one minute before you get a response to something else. :tsk::tsk:
 ForceFightWMe12
01-25-2006, 11:53 PM
#205
:xp: :xp: :xp:
I've been caught!!
:xp: :xp: :xp:
Actually, that one just kind of happened, though I can't say its not fun :D
 Hallucination
01-26-2006, 12:20 AM
#206
Yeah, it is pretty fun. :D
Keep up the good work, lock the doors and windows in your house, the stalkers come in the night;). And don't do drugs (I really like alliterations today).
 Renegade Puma
01-26-2006, 3:47 AM
#207
Yay! I am so glad to finally get to read a new chapter from FF :) Great job FF, keep it up. And give us a new chapter within a week ok? Yeah, that should do :)
 RC-1162
01-26-2006, 9:18 AM
#208
YAAHOOOOOO!!! excellent work, FFWM12, even though you dont like me XP
you have heard this i know, but still: Youre the awesomest, superest, bestest writer ive ever seen. (well, LF-talked-with):D
 MdKnightR
01-26-2006, 10:17 AM
#209
FINALLY!!! I was beginning to think you had a fatal case of writers' block. Great chapter!
 ForceFightWMe12
01-26-2006, 4:09 PM
#210
Thanks guys :D
For a while, I was thinking along the lines of you, MidKnight. I thought I was going to be dead in the water for...well...ever :'( But I'm back. Back again.

even though you dont like me XP

Where the heck did you get that idea??
 Snafu7
01-26-2006, 5:52 PM
#211
Another wonderful chapter FF, definately worth the wait, great job!
 ForceFightWMe12
01-27-2006, 4:33 PM
#212
Thanks, Snafu, glad you liked it :D
 Hallucination
01-27-2006, 7:22 PM
#213
Yay! I am so glad to finally get to read a new chapter from FF :) Great job FF, keep it up. And give us a new chapter within a week ok? Yeah, that should do :)
Rule of Fanfics #1: You don't pressure Forcefight or you'll get cancer of the right nebular for Christmas. ;)
So Forcefight, any spoilers on the next chapter?
 MasterAwder
01-27-2006, 7:28 PM
#214
great chapter
 ForceFightWMe12
01-27-2006, 7:52 PM
#215
Thanks guys :D
And you know, Hall's right :xp:

Spoilers, spoilers...well...I can tell you that **** go ***** *****, **** the ****** ****, ***** **** **** **** *********** that leads them to *********, but before **** *** *** back ** *** *******, Elron and *** ***** **** * **** set up by ******, who ***** *****. They try to **** ***** *** Ba**** *** ****, but *** **** **** ***** ****. *** too late anyway, the **** *** ******, and R**** *** *** ****** find ********** Knee-deep in ***** *** some other ********* ********.

Does that sooth your curiosity? :nut:

Most viewed fic in LF is 4500+

Do I qualify to take that spot yet? :xp:
 RC-1162
01-28-2006, 12:21 PM
#216
^^^
i guess so, seein that you have 4700+ views :D ;)

and BTW, am i writing spanish or did you put me on your ignore list, since you thoroughly ignore my requests to check out my fic.

and PS to all in general: whats 'FTW'??
 ForceFightWMe12
01-28-2006, 12:47 PM
#217
Omg, Your fic! I totally forgot I never replied!!! :open2:
I'm sorry, RC! I read your Mace fic a while ago, and apparently I forgot to put up a review :headbump: Sorry!
 Snafu7
01-28-2006, 2:19 PM
#218
and PS to all in general: whats 'FTW'??

Means "for the win"
 Hallucination
01-28-2006, 4:02 PM
#219
Spoilers, spoilers...well...I can tell you that **** go ***** *****, **** the ****** ****, ***** **** **** **** *********** that leads them to *********, but before **** *** *** back ** *** *******, Elron and *** ***** **** * **** set up by ******, who ***** *****. They try to **** ***** *** Ba**** *** ****, but *** **** **** ***** ****. *** too late anyway, the **** *** ******, and R**** *** *** ****** find ********** Knee-deep in ***** *** some other ********* ********.

Does that sooth your curiosity? :nut:

So they go to the unknown regions and get into some trouble?:xp: That's a little vague.;)
 Snafu7
01-28-2006, 4:37 PM
#220
That's a little vague.;)

hmmm... I'd say that cleared things right up :D
 Steve-O Kreesh
01-28-2006, 4:43 PM
#221
Nice chapter Forcefight. Keep up the good work!
 ForceFightWMe12
01-28-2006, 7:57 PM
#222
Well, that's part of it :xp: But not what's written there. Nice try :D
 JediKnight707
01-28-2006, 8:11 PM
#223
Pfft. Horrible chapter. :rofl: J/King. Don't wanna get killed by the others here. Though, I must say I thought that Brianna and Elron would do something
 ForceFightWMe12
01-28-2006, 8:38 PM
#224
Sick mind, JK, sick mind :xp: Who said they wont?
 JediKnight707
01-28-2006, 8:47 PM
#225
Hey! I was just saying that Brianna wasn't even mentioned.
 ForceFightWMe12
01-28-2006, 8:51 PM
#226
'Cause Briana was on the ship. Don't worry, she'll show up more in the next chapter.
 JediKnight707
01-28-2006, 8:53 PM
#227
She better, or else!! We'll be mad...
 ForceFightWMe12
01-28-2006, 8:56 PM
#228
Lol, well, a lot of stuff happens in the next chapter...or I might decide to divide next chapter into two different chapters...I dunno yet...
 JediKnight707
01-28-2006, 9:03 PM
#229
Uhmm, I have a suggestion: Give us chapters like.....at least monthly. Were all here hanging by the edge of our seats, and we get like nothing. *cries* It's just so sad to wait for it. :( And how do you know what happens in the next chapter??? Do you have connections with the author or something?
 ForceFightWMe12
01-28-2006, 9:13 PM
#230
Oh, I have my ways :marx1:
And as for the monthy updates, I try to get the chapters out at a reasonable rate, but sometimes...it just doesn't work out that way :animelol:
 JediKnight707
01-28-2006, 9:32 PM
#231
Ya, sometimes it just takes like....thirty years for an update :)
 ForceFightWMe12
01-28-2006, 9:42 PM
#232
And yet you yell at me for taking a month and a half :xp: j.k.

Alright, I'm setting a deadline for myself. This chapter I posted at 1/25/06. My deadline for the next one will be....2/15/06.
 RC-1162
01-29-2006, 7:47 AM
#233
^^
thats too long. but ill wait if it means a good chapter is coming up :D
its ok bout the fic, i just wanna know what you thinkbout it
 Master Reven
02-02-2006, 6:40 PM
#234
keep it up! oh and I'll hold you to your deadline so don't forget
 ForceFightWMe12
02-11-2006, 1:20 PM
#235
What's this? A new chapter coming four days early?? :xp: Yes, it is! This chapter's a bit longer...almost 2,000 words...I didn't think it was possible for one of my chapters to be this long...:xp: 890 posts!! W00t! Go me :D

Alright, anyway. Here's the new chapter, ahead of schedual (don't get used to it :xp: )


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---Chapter Fourteen---


“Hey guys…look at this.” Carth said, moving one of the high-beam lights on the submersible’s hull on what appeared to be a large crack in the Rift wall. The three had been searching for several hours now, trying to locate anything that could lead them to what secrets the waters of Manaan were hiding so jealously…this looked the most promising.
Revan swung another of the lights onto the crack, “It looks as if there’s some kind of cave behind it…Do you think we can fit through?”
“Give me all primary controls.” Carth said, “I’ll squeeze us in there.
The rent in the stone ran lengthwise, and appeared to the large enough for the sub to fit through. Hopefully.
“Easy does it…” Carth murmured to no one in particular, pressing slightly down on the throttle. He kept it open just enough for them to inch forward against the tide. However, fitting through didn’t turn out to be as easy as they had thought.
Screeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!
The terrible noise of metal against rock rent the waters, slicing straight through the ears of the three companions.
“Heheh, oops.” Carth said, straightening the sub again, bringing them off the rocks. The top and bottom of the transport slid just under the rock lip, leaving only centimeters to spare. However, in a moment, they were through.
The beams of light from their sub scanned across the rock surfaces, showing them what appeared to be…
“Runes.” Revan breathed.
Sure enough, three rows of carved runes ran across the rock at different intervals, leading upwards.
“Bring her up, Carth.” Revan said.
“But there’s nothing but rock up there--”
“Trust me on this one. Bring her up.”
“Alright, but if we end up like bugs on a speeder’s windshield, don’t blame me…”
The pilot slowly turned the nose of the submersible up at the ceiling of the cave. As they rose through the waters, they saw light spilling out from somewhere above.
Carth was right, the ceiling of the cave was solid rock, however, the walls weren’t. A single wall, to be precises.
“An air pocket.” Bastila murmured.
“My guess was that it never used to be an ‘air pocket’. Did you see the stairs carved into the side of the wall?” Revan asked as Carth eased them forward.
“I think that adds to the theory of the surface of Manaan not always being water.”
“Well, whatever’s up there,” Carth began, “We’re about to find out. Up we go.”
Even as he said the words, the sub shot upward, rocking back and forth as they surfaced. The pilot guided the ship up to the edge of the water, where he stopped and shut down the engines.
There was a hiss of escaping air, and Revan climbed out from his cockpit, walking carfully across the sub until he was able to leap to the rock floor. There were another two hisses, and Carth and Bastila joined him.
“This reminds me too much of our last visit to Manaan.” Revan murmured. The ‘cave’ they had stepped into appeared to have actually been a hallway, ancient light strips that hadn’t been activated in ages lined the walls, runes scrolling underneath them.
“I’ll say.” Carth said, “This place gives me the creeps.”
“It should,” Bastila said, barely audible, “It reeks of Dark Energy.”
Revan reached into a pack on his belt, and pulled out a small, pen-sized rod. He turned the top of it, and a beam of light shot out, illuminating a small patch of the wall. “Well, we’re not doing much just standing here. C’mon.” and with that, proceeded into the darkness of the hallway.

~*~*~

And of all the Jedi teachings…

Briana read the datapad before her. Having nothing more to do, she decided she would take a refresher course in the Jedi teachings.

…the most predominate and important of them all…

It had been hours, and not so much as a word from anyone. She supposed no news was good news. After all, if someone had been hurt, they would have returned to the Hawk immediately, right?

…is the teaching of self-restraint and suppression of emotions…

The Handmaiden hardly took in the information as she read the words. Her mind was with Elron, in the streets of Manaan.

…Chief among these emotions…

The feeling of his hands gently caressing her skin…a shiver went up her spine. She…she was going to want that again.

…are the feelings of anger…

The touch of his lips as they pressed against hers…she felt her cheeks redden at the thought.

…and of love.

~*~*~

Elron searched through all of Ahto, finding neither of the two things he was looking for. One item was more information on this…finding that Revan had discovered. The other, was Visas.
Visas! he frowned, Where could you have gone?
After a moment, he fell back against one of the walls of the courtyard, sliding down to the ground.
Great, Elron, nice job. he thought, pounding his head against the metal, Win over Briana, and make an enemy out of Visas. Just perfect.
What did the Miraluka care anyway? It wasn’t as if Elron had shown her…much special treatment, or attention. Except, perhaps, on the Ravager. The things he had said, the way he protected her…the way he felt…
Ah, but what was he supposed to do? He couldn’t just let Nhilus devour her! Nor could he have killed her, a wound and defensless opponent, when they had first met (or, better to say, fought) on the Ebon Hawk.

~*~*~

“Urgh!” Bastila murmured, picking bits of cobweb from her hair, “How did these get down here anyway?”
“I dunno, doesn’t seem to me as if something could get this far down under the surface without some kind of fins…” Carth said, his voice echoing back and forth down the stone hallway.
“Guys, look.”
The Jedi and pilot drew level with Revan, who was pointing straight ahead. There was…a light.
“What is that?” Bastila whispered. She didn’t like the looks of it, but Revan’s resolve was set in stone.
“There’s only one way to find out,” he said, and proceeded further into the darkness.
After several moments of walking through total silence, the threesome had reached the ‘light’. And what they saw amazed them.
“By the Force…” Revan said, stepping into the vast room, but his voice was drowned out by the sound of…waterfalls?
The room was gigantic, easily the size of half the Jedi Enclave at Dantooine. The strangest thing was that the room was lit with sunlight.
“But, how--” Carth began, when Revan pointed upwards.
There was a great monolith in the center of the room, and it reached up to the ceiling…hundreds of feet above them, where there appeared to be a circular hole cut into the stone, which allowed in light. Along with the light, however, came tons and tons of water, falling all that way around the monolith, into a pit at the great tower’s base. The pit itself seemed to have a second hole in it which allowed the water to drain out as fast as it came in.
The walls formed a circular base to the room, three other empty doorways carved into them at points that would be marked North, East, and West on a compass.
“What should we do now?” Bastila asked, having to nearly shout to make herself heard, “It would take us forever to search each of those pathways.”
“We’ll split up.” Revan answered.
“Are you crazy?!” Carth asked increduosly, “Who knows what’s down there! What if something happens?”
“You two have comms. with you, don’t you?” Revan asked.
“Well sure, but will they work through these walls?”
“We’ll have to hope. Now c’mon.” the Jedi removed his cloak, and dropped it on the ground at the mouth of the entrance. “Just so that we remember which way is out.” he explained, before the three wished the Force be with each other, and departed, each down a separate path.

~*~*~

“…and plus five is twenty.” Atton said, slapping a +/-5 pazzak card down on the table.
“Damn it!” his opponent, a wheezened, old ‘champ’, cursed, slamming his hand down before pushing his credits across the table to Atton.
“Pure pazzak!” the Scoundrel murmured, before collecting the credits and depositing them in his pocket. “How ‘bout another game?”
“No, that’s it for me, I’m all out.” his opponent said, before standing and leaving the cantina.
“Well, that purse buys us the next couple of drinks.” Mira said, taking the old man’s seat and sliding a glass of juma across to Atton.
“Heh, that purse buys us the next couple month’s worth of drinks.” he bragged, taking a swig.
“Yeah, yeah.” she said, reaching in a pocket of her pants and pulling out a deck of her own, “Let’s just see how good you are, flyboy. Five hundred credits says I beat you.” she challenged.
“We couldn’t have picked a better place to look for info,” Atton murmured, “Because five hundred says you can’t.”

~*~*~

Frustration bubbled up in Elron as the Exile stood once again. He had to get moving. He entered the West Courtyard of Ahto, moving past the courthouses to the hotel further up the road, when he noticed a Selkath and an un-armored Mandalorian speaking in one of the allies.
Wait a minute… the Exile thought as he passed, This doesn’t seem right…
He walked casually by the alley, then stopped at the other side, pressed himself up against the wall, and used the Force to enhance his hearing.
“Your men are in place, yes?”
That was the Selkath.
“Of course, why wouldn’t they be, Duulas? Look, we’re professionals, and there’s no way we’re going to let a prey like Revan slip through our fingers.”
“They had better be, Mandalorian. If Revan and his companions escape and this whole thing is traced back to me, then it will be your head, you understand? You aren’t the only one working for me in this city as well as under the sea.”
“I’ve got it covered. You just relax and let us do your dirty work for you.” the Mandalorian said disdainfully.
Elron’s eyes sharpened. What? Revan? Men?
This isn’t good… Elron thought, running further down the boardwalk, Not good at all.
He grabbed the comm. from his belt as he slid into a side alley, then activated it after checking to see no one was around.
“Revan? Revan! This is the Exile, come in Revan! It’s urgent!!”
Nothing but fuzz. They were out of reach.
“Oh no…” he thought, running to find the others, “No!”

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 Hallucination
02-11-2006, 1:41 PM
#236
Another great chapter, keep it up!
>_>
<_<
It makes me guilty to point out little errors like this, so I'll spoilerize it:Pure pazaak is 20, not 21.
 ForceFightWMe12
02-11-2006, 2:35 PM
#237
I knew that :xp: What game is it with 21? Black Jack?
 Hallucination
02-11-2006, 3:38 PM
#238
^Yes, that's the one. So what's the new deadline?
 ForceFightWMe12
02-11-2006, 3:48 PM
#239
Hey, I just posted one ahead of schedual, gimme a break :xp:
 Hallucination
02-11-2006, 4:48 PM
#240
Hey, I just posted one ahead of schedule, gimme a break :xp:
One what? And you can never plan ahead too much. ;)

P.S. You should visit Ahto more often, it's a cool place. :cool:
 ForceFightWMe12
02-11-2006, 5:50 PM
#241
Schedule. I hate that word. I can never spell it right...

I know, and I'm working (kinda) on the next chapter. Hopefully it'll be done in a month. At least :xp:
 Steve-O Kreesh
02-11-2006, 10:49 PM
#242
The story is getting good ForceFight. Keep up the good work. I look forward to the next chapter. ;)
 MdKnightR
02-12-2006, 8:26 PM
#243
Another excellent chapter, ForceFight! Keep it up. This really leaves me hungry for more.
 ForceFightWMe12
02-12-2006, 9:40 PM
#244
Oh, doesn't it though? :dev9: Ah, cliffhangers. The finest tool of the writter...:xp:
 JediKnight707
02-12-2006, 10:13 PM
#245
Wow. Two whole chapters without a single kiss. What's up with that?
 Hallucination
02-12-2006, 10:16 PM
#246
Oh, doesn't it though? :dev9: Ah, cliffhangers. The finest tool of the writter...:xp:
I'm afraid you're wrong there. Proper spelling, grammar, and punctuation are the finest tools of a writer.
 ForceFightWMe12
02-12-2006, 10:17 PM
#247
Hey, this part is action....ish. A forewarning, there'll probably be a third chapter without a kiss, and then there'll be some mushy-gushy romance for ya :xp:
 JediKnight707
02-12-2006, 10:22 PM
#248
Awww man! I wanted Brianna and Elron to like...go to at least 2nd base. :lol: So when's your date for next chapter?
 ForceFightWMe12
02-12-2006, 10:24 PM
#249
I...don't know yet. I have to see how easily I can write it first :xp:
 Renegade Puma
02-14-2006, 4:39 AM
#250
Great chapter Forcefight, keep up the wonderful work.
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