Kado Sunrider

03-25-2009, 11:37 PM
#4

Very good Ky! I particularly liked the comparison of the Sith and Jedi being the sun and the moon. Very true, and a very good metaphor. Nice work!... [Read More]

Posted in: March '09: Farewells

Kado Sunrider

03-22-2009, 2:25 PM
#3

I loved the ending to Mr_BFA's 'There is no Death, there is the Force'. Excellent way to finish. Gave me a good chuckle.... [Read More]

Posted in: Brothers-in-Arms #1: The Beginning of the End

Kado Sunrider

03-19-2009, 10:27 PM
#7

Geonosis 1200 Hours 22 BBY A group of twelve clones, decked in there shiny white armor stood inside the dark confines of the drop bay of the LAAT/i gunship that would be bringing them to their destination. Talon Division would be securing the arena,... [Read More]

Posted in: Brothers-in-Arms #1: The Beginning of the End

Kado Sunrider

03-17-2009, 7:49 PM
#5

thank you sir. :) New chapter coming out shortly.... [Read More]

Posted in: Brothers-in-Arms #1: The Beginning of the End

Kado Sunrider

03-15-2009, 8:57 PM
#3

thanks for the reply LotF! First, for your thing with that sentence, I see where you're coming from. What I meant to imply was that the clone who thumped KA-113 on the back had the tray of food and got thumped on the back himself as he sat down. ya... [Read More]

Posted in: Brothers-in-Arms #1: The Beginning of the End

Kado Sunrider

03-14-2009, 7:12 PM
#1

This was inspired by CommanderQ's The Company Fic, and is the story of one clones survival of the Clone Wars. Hope you enjoy! Tipoca City, Kamino 0300 Hours 22 BBY The bright lights of KA-113's quarters blazed on. 3 AM standard time. Time to w... [Read More]

Posted in: Initiation

Kado Sunrider

03-12-2009, 9:26 PM
#5

I knows theres not much to say about it, but commenting does inspire. The first chapter is almost done, look forward to the next installment. ;)... [Read More]

Posted in: Initiation

Kado Sunrider

03-11-2009, 7:37 PM
#2

I hate to put it like this, especially since no one has posted except me, but unless I get some feedback, I'll be dropping this story, and its going to be a good one...... [Read More]

Posted in: Initiation

Kado Sunrider

03-07-2009, 10:51 PM
#1

Prologue ~*~*~ 29 BBY The beeping alarm of the navicomputer woke Jedi Knight Hala Je'nal from her reverie in the cockpit of her borrowed light freighter. Reaching out with the Force, she felt the countdown timer reach zero, then gripped the lever w... [Read More]

Posted in: The Value of Cheating

Kado Sunrider

03-07-2009, 10:24 PM
#2

very interesting read here. The Twi'lek master reminded me of a slightly more light-side oriented Kreia.... [Read More]

Posted in: Letting Go

Kado Sunrider

03-25-2009, 12:19 AM
#4

lol well, if it was unintentional, then its awesome. That you came up with the same thing as a professional writer is definitely not a bad thing. :xp: I know what you mean. I always find my errors after i post the story, so most of my editing is do... [Read More]

Posted in: Letting Go

Kado Sunrider

03-24-2009, 8:46 PM
#2

nice story Ky. I must say that the whole misty mind shadow thing was a bit harry potter, but the story itself was sound. I did notice a few grammatical errors, but nothing so terrible that it interrupted the flow of the reading. Nice work my friend... [Read More]

Posted in: March '09: Farewells

Kado Sunrider

03-21-2009, 4:21 AM
#20

excellent. Looking forward to tommorow. For now, its time to sleep. I've been dancing WAY to much for the last 4 hours.... [Read More]

Posted in: March '09: Farewells

Kado Sunrider

03-19-2009, 11:22 PM
#17

When does the voting period begin? This saturday?... [Read More]

Posted in: March '09: Farewells

Kado Sunrider

03-08-2009, 5:13 PM
#9

My first Tale has been submitted! :) No telling what its about though.... [Read More]

Posted in: Calm Shot

Kado Sunrider

03-08-2009, 4:15 PM
#2

whoa... deep stuff. But I enjoyed it. Well written and engaging. 2 thumbs up! xD... [Read More]

Posted in: Beta reader request thread

Kado Sunrider

03-06-2009, 4:36 PM
#4

Sorry Jae for posting a link. :doh: I wasn't planning on posting the whole story here. Its technically a novel. Right now its going on 20 pages, and I'm only writing chapter one!... [Read More]

Posted in: Requesting Beta Readers for my novel

Kado Sunrider

03-04-2009, 6:51 PM
#1

Hey all, I recently began writing my own novel, set in the year 3000 C.E. Its loosely based on many sci-fi settings, including star wars. Its not very long ATM, and its mostly in the planning stage, but I could definitely use help looking over my wo... [Read More]

Posted in: Family of choice 2: Gathering the clans

Kado Sunrider

03-28-2009, 9:28 PM
#15

excellent work. Oh boy I can't wait till they get back to Canderous! One small error... She Her tone was breathless. Third to last paragraph in the 4th section. :) Thanks for the interesting read!... [Read More]

Posted in: Family of choice 2: Gathering the clans

Kado Sunrider

03-17-2009, 7:03 PM
#13

Nice chapter Mach. :) Beautifully written and as always, an interesting read. Keep it up. I've been enjoying this story since the beginning. ;)... [Read More]

Posted in: A Soul Adrift

Kado Sunrider

03-04-2009, 1:29 AM
#122

oh yay! Looking forward to Sri's next adventure. I must say this is really an awesome story. BTW, Endo, did you receive my PM? :ohdear:... [Read More]

Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents

Kado Sunrider

03-14-2009, 6:34 PM
#978

That's only if we were in a test, unless your school was run by nazis. Also, you used "we're", meaning 'we are', when you should have used 'were'. o_Qoops. I tend to do that in my writing a lot as well. Always need to go back and review f... [Read More]

Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents

Kado Sunrider

03-14-2009, 4:02 PM
#976

COnsider it this way Kado; if we were in school and I told you that you mispelled a word, I wouldn't expect you to ask permission to correct it. I just looked at the line with 30+ years of experience in editing my own work and made the correctiion I... [Read More]

Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents

Kado Sunrider

03-13-2009, 1:41 AM
#972

Awesome. :) I'll definitely fix that sentence. If you noticed anything glaringly obvious, drop me a message. Do you mind if I copy/paste that right into the story? EDIT: I also edited the story post to state the time, 29 years BBY. :) EDIT2: BTW... [Read More]

Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents

Kado Sunrider

03-12-2009, 10:39 PM
#970

awesome. I didn't even know this existed. AND I received PotW without even knowing it. lol Thanks for the reviews Mach, can't wait for a review of my next story.... [Read More]

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