machievelli

For those who haven't read the Lady Death Series, If you change the skin color to a bronze rather than red, Purgatori is what Lilith looks like Lilith Part of me wanted to fly to Hell’s Gate; to report to Belial and beg to be replaced. I cou... [Read More]

Posted in: The Squad

machievelli

03-06-2009, 12:22 AM
#17

I glared at the office I had been assigned. Ten years as a cop, every minute on the street or SWAT. Now I had a frigging office. Nice sized compared to most, with a glass wall so I could watch my team in action. Team. A collection of monsters and m... [Read More]

Posted in: The Squad

machievelli

02-27-2009, 11:18 AM
#16

Hollow in what way? I thought it was interesting. It gave a lot more explanations about the setting and its different "species". Aside from a few spelling errors, there's nothing I could say I didn't like. I was considering expanding it r... [Read More]

Posted in: The Squad

machievelli

02-26-2009, 7:27 PM
#14

That last section feels a little hollow to me. Anyone agree?... [Read More]

Posted in: Family of choice 2: Gathering the clans

machievelli

03-05-2009, 10:00 PM
#11

“Not good.” Leco picked up one of the rifles. “Seya Copa M&C projectile rifles, local constabulary issue.” He could detect three confused looks. “The local militia and constabulary aren’t what you would call in... [Read More]

Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents

machievelli

03-13-2009, 11:48 AM
#974

Awesome. :) I'll definitely fix that sentence. If you noticed anything glaringly obvious, drop me a message. Do you mind if I copy/paste that right into the story? EDIT: I also edited the story post to state the time, 29 years BBY. :) EDIT2: BTW... [Read More]

Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents

machievelli

03-13-2009, 1:25 AM
#971

This week I’m going to address something that bothers all of us who do write here. That is silence from our readers. I know there is no rule that you have to post a comment, but anything, even a ‘read’ which is what I post on th... [Read More]

Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents

machievelli

03-06-2009, 2:04 AM
#968

Coruscant Entertainment Center The End of an Era (http://www.lucasforums.com/showthread.php?t=196086) LordMcGuffin KOTOR on Tatooine: A Mando considers this present plight. There isn’t much, but what I see needs work. First, remember; reread... [Read More]

Posted in: The Critic's 2 cents

machievelli

02-27-2009, 12:55 AM
#964

Coruscant Entertainment Center Reflections (http://www.lucasforums.com/showthread.php?t=195448) Chevron 7 Locke Before ANH: Old enemies meet, and perhaps can be friends All of the commentary by others is cogent, especially DY’s comments abou... [Read More]

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