Welcome to the Forums Kas'!m and I never imagined Grivis becoming an editor. I'm looking foward to more. Keep it up.
Welcome to the Forums Kas'!m and I never imagined Grivis becoming an editor. I'm looking foward to more. Keep it up.
Well you imagined wrong.:D:xp: Anyway Kas!m I sent you chapter 1 back.
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Good Chapter, but I was just wondering why you made the text colour different in the Prologue and the first Chapter. Also where it says Coruscant and Jedi Temple, keep them both to the left, since it looks a bit stupid having Coruscant on the left and Jedi Temple on the right hand side of the post. Looking foward to more.
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Changed it. So any suggestions. It just doesn't feel right that nobody has disargeed with it yet. I can't be that good of a writer.
Change the text colour to white. The only time I feel a different colour is okay is in the Chapter title and the Prologue, like you've done. But other than that, it should be all white. That is a suggestion for you.
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It is Good. I think you are a good writer. I like it. A suggestion is Continue.
I would feel better if it had more reviews.
Be patient. Nobody read my Fics for a long time. It might be the same for you.
More reviews? Sorry, no, but here's some of my comments:
Well, I just finished this fic, and I have nothing to say but "For your sake, continue, as this fic is too terrific to stop." Besides, I'd like you to seperate every dialog, which you did so, and to seperate every paragraph. That will make the fic easier to read.
Also, Welcome to LucasForums. Have a nice time here! Oh, and have a nice Thanksgiving, Kas'!m!
Great work and keep it going! :D Im enjoying it
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Another good Chapter, but why is Chapter 2 called Malachor V as well? Also, you don't need to make the colour of the text white, when it is already white. Looking foward to more as always.
Malachor is the location, not title. Sorry for that. You're not mad about HK-47's death are you?
No not at all. Although there might be some people who might be. Like the fans of HK. It's up to you though, it is your Fic.
You're not mad about HK-47's death are you?
You Killed HK-47!?!?!?!? :eyeraise: Grrrrrrrrrrrr........ :firemad: Now I gonna get ya! :slsaber:
Now who's gonna replace everyone's favorite Meatbag killing droid? Anyway, other than you killing HK it's a good fic.
HK alas has died but thy HK is still alive in thine games of KOTOR(sorry CSI) But thine(yours) story is still good.
HK alas has died but thy HK is still alive in thine games of KOTOR(sorry CSI) But thine(yours) story is still good.
Off topic: What are you saying sorry for?
Off topic items should be discussed in PMs, otherwise you're spamming the thread. --Jae
On topic: I have no comment on HK's dead. Well, I'd like he is still in one piece, but it's your story. BTW, I don't really like the plot of both DS Revan and DS Exile. But I'd like to read on, so keep up.
You Killed HK-47!?!?!?!? :eyeraise: Grrrrrrrrrrrr........ :firemad: Now I gonna get ya! :slsaber:
Now who's gonna replace everyone's favorite Meatbag killing droid? Anyway, other than you killing HK it's a good fic.
Patience, young padawan. Patience. Passion leads to anger. Anger leads to hatred. Hatred leads to strength. Strength leads to power. Power leads to victory. Victory leads to Darkside. Beware of the darkside. If you begin to sway to DS, I'm sure I'll try to redeem you first, if it fails, then I'm sorry, I have to use my lightsabers to help you to become one with the Force. :slsaber: :slsaber: (Two images as I'm a Jar'Kai user)
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Good one, I didn't edit this one. But its good:)
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Mission a Jedi? That's new, other than the Mod, RedHawke released. Anyway good Chapter as always.
Actually Carth is better than Mission in my opinion.
In my opion canderous is better then Carth or Mission:xp:
No, Mandalorians shouldn't be Jedi, and besides he would be a Sith not Jedi... :p
Yeah, I don't think I've ever met a Mandalorian who was Force Sensitive, unless you use the mod by Redhawke to make Canderous a Jedi.
Well I don't think Mandalorians should be Force Sensitive, but whatever, it's your story.
Mission as a Jedi? Interesting... Keep up, Kas'!m. I like your fic.
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In my opion canderous is better then Carth or Mission:xp:
Actually, I like Carth and Mission, better than Canderous :xp:. I found them a lot more useful than Canderous. At least in TSL, he did something for me. Anyway, getting back on topic, I'm looking foward to the next Chapter Kas'!m.
Another good chapter. Looking forward to see more.
i never said i liked him:xp: hes.........~snipped~ We don't use that term here unless you mean 'really happy'. --Jae
Augh.... I hate Nihilus...... he is a poor excuse for a Sith Lord.... he knows nothing of power.... I should train him in the ways of the Force..... lol
Agreed. I think Kas'!m means Malak, if he is talking about KOTOR and not TSL.
~snipped~ We don't use that term here unless you mean 'really happy'. --Jae
What if we used the word "Strange" or "Odd", then can it mean the same thing? And what happened to my post Momerator? It was on-topic, I think...
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this is really good Kas'!m, but i still think that Mandalorians shouldn't be Jedi
The strange/odd/other euphemisms....My general philosophy--if it's not nice to say, don't say it.
Posts get deleted if they're spam, off-topic, or offensive. PM me if you'd like to discuss it so we can keep the thread on-topic. --Jae
There are lots of species that haven't had Jedi throughout their history...
1. Tusken Raiders (Which that gives me an Idea for a recruitment mod)
2. Utapaun
3. Mustafarian
4. Neimoidian
5. Gungan
6. Geonosian
7. Bith
8. Bothan
9. Kaminoan
10. Polis Massan
Should I continue?
As far as I know no
1. Mon-Clamari
2. Ugnaught
3. Weequay
4. Jawa
5. Gamorrean
6. Falleen
7. Ewok
8. Duros
9. Aqualish
10. Noghri
Shall I continue again?
And your using a Mustafaarian in your story?? That is interesting.
As far as I know no
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Shall I continue again?
On topic: Nice written in all.
Off topic: The races can have Jedi:
Bothan
Gangan
Noghrican
Bith
Kaminoan
Polis Massan (Should have more Jedi than human because they have no mouth)
Ugnaught
Pau'an (Taller sub-species of Utapaun)
Weequay
Falleen (Face it, there are some Falleen Jedis thoughout the galaxy, if you don't believe, go check wookiepedia.)
For Aqualish, I believe they already have Jedi, which I don't know the names.