Revan entered the map room and looked into one of Atris' new Star Maps (place a small sphere on a small projector and you can view the entire region). Revan examined the Wild Space region and noticed a large amount of power coming from Mustafar. This greatly confused Revan, but he decided to go on a covert mission to see what is happening there. Revan was walking to the hangar but he was intercepted by Bastila. "Just where do you think you're going?" she asked.

"Not this time. You must stay this time." told Revan.

"Have you learned nothing of your wife's stubborness?" asked Carth, holding his lightsaber.

"Get used to it, honey. We're going with you."

Revan sighed.


Revan, Carth and Bastila got aboard the Ebon Hawk. "Why?" asked Bastila.

"Why what?" replied Revan.

"Why would you leave me? You know where you go, I'm going to be fighting beside you."

"We're going to Mustafar. That's why."

"So you're worried that I'll get abducted again or burnt by lava."

"YES!"

"There's no need to shout."

Revan sighed "I know... but the thought of losing you is painful."

Bastila grasped his hand "But I am with you. And with you is all the protection I need."

"I hope you're right." Revan shut his eyes and began to walk away, but Bastila pulled him back and kissed him. Revan broke off and walked to the cockpit, he wasn't in the mood for romance.

"I think this is first time you're not in the mood for romance, Revan." observed Carth.

"I'm too worried for her, Carth. I'm a Jedi, I'm supposed to be at peace, not stressed out of my mind." replied Revan.

"Don't worry, buddy. If Malus has returned to Mustafar, we're gonna end the war here. And when we get back to Coruscant, we'll have a big celebration, and you and Bastila can get a well deserved rest." told Carth.

"One day with Bastila, alone, is all I long for."

"We're coming up on Mustafar, time to find what we missed." told Carth.


Revan, Bastila and Carth left the Ebon Hawk in search of what Revan found on the Star Map. Revan could sense some Dark Side energies coming from a couple kilometers behind the old refinery, victim to Revan's vendetta. Revan and his company, travelled a bit more. With every step, the Dark Side grew stronger. After one more kilometer of walking, they finally found what they missed. It was a Sith Acadamy. "I can't believe I missed this." told Revan.

"You were rescueing Bastila." reminded Carth.

"I suppose you're right." replied Revan.

"We must go inside." told Bastila.

"Then lets go." ordered Revan.


Revan, Bastila and Carth entered the acadamy, sabers up. Revan led the way, he knew that the Sith knew of their presence. As soon as they got past the main hallway, the door behind them shut, some Sith Assassins revealed themselves and attacked them. Their lives were ended shortly. Revan and his company advanced and fought their way to the main chamber, where Tulak Hord was waiting for them. "Hello, Revan." greeted Tulak.

"You must be Tulak Hord." answered Revan.

"You're correct."

"Why did you accept Malus' lie?" asked Revan.

"Oh, I knew it was a lie, I wanted to be alive again." answered Tulak.

"You're a Wraith of Darkness. You're nither living nor dead." told Revan.

"Close enough." replied the undead lord, igniting his saber.

"Be careful everyone. Especially you, Bastila." ordered Revan, igniting his sabers.

"I'll be fine." she replied, igniting her doublesaber.

"The reason Malus ressurected him is because he is the most skilled lightsaber duelist of his time." told Revan.

"Well that's comforting." joked Carth.

"Carth! This isn't the time for jokes." blurted Bastila.


Tulak Hord lunged at Revan and threw everything he had to offer. Revan blocked every swipe, every stab, every slash and every kick. Revan backflipped towards Bastila to protect her. Carth lunged at the wraith, but his fight didn't last as long as Revan's. Tulak threw Carth into the wall and he was knocked out. Tulak attacked Revan again and fought him away from Bastila. Tulak took the oppertunity and lunged at Bastila. Bastila put up a good fight, but the battle went into Tulak's favour. He caught Bastila off guard and sliced her left hand's fingers off. She lay on the ground screaming in extreme pain. Revan heard his wife's screams and Revan attacked Tulak, without mercy. Revan cut Tulak's saber in half and made it unusable. "If you're so powerful, you'd be able to beat me in a fist battle, Skywalker." told Tulak. Revan put away his sabers and got into Teras Kasi, while Tulak got into Krayt Dragon. Revan did a small jump kick and landed a blow on Tulak's face. Tulak attempted to swipe at Revan's face, but his blow was blocked and Revan gave him a blow to the gut. Revan gave Tulak three blows to the throat, did a three-sixty degree spin and uppercutted him in the chin, therefore, switching into Jedi Fist. Tulak changed his style to Moi Fah, hoping that it would best Revan's Jedi Fist. Tulak tried to land some blows, but Revan dodged them. Revan switched his stance to Hapkido and his extreme quickness brought Hord to his knees. Revan kept hitting Hord, until he fell down, blacked out. Revan ran over to Bastila. "Damnit..."

"It's okay... I can get some mechanical ones."

"Are you able to walk?" asked Revan.

"I think he swiped at my thigh, after he cut my fingers off... But it's just a scratch this time."

"Other than that, you have four severed limbs."

"If it weren't for you, I'd have more than my fingers missing."

"This is why I wan't to go alone. I don't want you hurt."

"The only thing that can hurt me is if our bond of love is broken."


Revan brought Bastila and Carth back to the Ebon Hawk, safely. Revan healed Bastila's thigh scratch, and intalled some mechanical fingers. Revan took the cockpit and flew home to Coruscant.



(Chapter facts:
Conversation similarities:
First one:
Original Dialect (LOTR):
Gimli: Just where do you think you're going?
Aragorn: Not this time. This time you must stay.
Legolas: Have you learned nothing of the stubborness of dwarves?
Gimli: Might as well accept it. We're going with you, laddie.

Coversation:
Bastila: Just where do you think you're going?
Revan: Not this time. You must stay here this time.
Carth: Have you learned nothing of your wife's stubborness?
Bastila: Get used to it, Honey. We're going with you.

Fist fight styles:
Jedi Fist is taken from the name Shaolin Fist, which is used by: Kung Lao and Shujinko in the Mortal Kombat games. Hapkido and Moi Fah are both the styles used by Scorpion in Mortal Kombat: Deception. The moves from the Teras Kasi style, are similar to the moves used by the style: Mantis, used by Shujinko and Kung Lao again.)

(I've noticed some fanfic's closing and they're author's banned. Is this going to happen to me?)

only if you break rules, which is what happened with those particular authors. No worries for you! --Jae

(I've noticed some fanfic's closing and they're author's banned. Is this going to happen to me?)

No, it won't (It won't happen to me either, hopefully). It's because the Writers are idiots and aren't writing decent Chapters. connor's so-called brother is banned and someone else was too.

Anyway, I don't want to be cruel, so I'll return to my normal mood. Good Chapter Revanscool and I'm looking foward to more.

They got banned for breaking rules. We'll never ban someone who's just trying to write a story, even if it's not a good story. --Jae

Banned? That's a little over-reacting. Anyways, yeah, good chapter, i liked it altough try to make limb-losing a little more rare, okey? If yes, answer with dokey. :xp:

Banned? That's a little over-reacting. Anyways, yeah, good chapter, i liked it altough try to make limb-losing a little more rare, okey? If yes, answer with dokey. :xp:

We can't argue with the Mods. Besides, I find them a lot more fair and more entertaining then other Mods on other Forums. Anyway, limb-losing isn't very rare in Star Wars.

Episode I: Darth Maul is chopped in half.

Episode II: Anakin loses a hand.

Episode III: Count Dooku's head is cut off, Mace loses a hand.

Episode IV: None that I know of.

Episode V: Luke loses a hand.

Episode VI: Vader loses a hand.

Just another day in the Star Wars Galaxy... Looking foward to more, Revanscool, as said before.

Episode II: Anakin loses a forearm.

Just another day in the Star Wars Galaxy... Looking foward to more, Revanscool, as said before.
The bolded part is corrected, Dooku chopped off Anakin's right forerarm, not hand. ;)

The bolded part is corrected, Dooku chopped off Anakin's right forerarm, not hand. ;)

Same thing, thanks for the correction.

Episode III: Anakin loses three limbs, Storm Troopers lose some heads

Look, i know, Star Wars wouldn't be Star Wars without dismemberment but it just sounded...bland and pointless Bastila losing her fingers. Oh well, when can we expect next chapter?

More lost limbs. HAHAHA! I really don't know yet. But I'll try and get it soon.

(Very sorry)

Malus' fleet came out of hyperspace to an unsuspecting Telos. "Sir, why are we attacking Telos?" asked one of Malus' generals "It is on the brink of death. No use to us."

"It might not be any use to us, but I plan to lure out some of the Jedi." answered Malus.

"Understood my lord."


Atris came out of meditation and called everyone to the council chamber. "I have called you all here because I sensed Malus attacking Telos." told Atris.

"You aren't joking." replied Revan.

"I will see to it's defense and I request that Brianna comes with me." asked Atris.

"Sensible." told Bastila.


Atris and Brianna readied an army to defend Telos. But on the flagship, Atris had some questions for Brianna. "Why did you betray me and train as a Jedi?" she asked.

"Atris, you have to understand, there is the betrayal of you, then there was the betrayal of my mother. And I chose my mother." answered Brianna.

"Did you have feelings for the Exile?"

"I'd appreciate it if you called him Jaden. I did."

"Did you love him?"

Brianna hesitated, "I did."

"Do you have feelings for Carth?"

"As a father, the actions after Kamino were a show of thanks."

"I see."

"Why did you ask of me to betray my mother?" Brianna began questioning.

"Because I feared you would go to the Dark Side."

"Which you did, did you not?"

"I did. But the-... Jaden, has more qualities in him than I saw."

"Why did you want him dead?"

"I- I- uhhhhh." stuttered Atris.

"Hmmm."


Atris, Brianna and their army reinforced the Telosian army in their struggle against Malus' fleet. "We will board the flagship and try and end this war here." ordered Atris. Brianna and Atris got into Jedi Starfighters and flew off with a squad of Mandalorians. Atris and Brianna flew off into Malus' flagship while the Mandalorians distracted the Sith. Atris and Brianna weren't welcomed warmly when they boarded, there were blaster shots flying everywhere. But Atris jumped down and killed off the gunners. Dark Jedi entered the room, inexperienced, Brianna made short work of them. Brianna and Atris ventured through the flagship and battled their way to Malus.

"I admire your performance." he commented.

"Your treachery will end here." told Brianna.

"Ah those are familiar words." replied Malus "Everyone who used those words, I defeated."

Brianna and Atris attacked Malus, Malus still wouldn't remove the cloak covering his arm. Brianna and Atris fought against Malus greatly. Brianna was a great challange for him because of her being an echani. Atris' could see Malus' movements coming through the Force. Malus got the better on both of them and kicked them back. Malus strode over to Brianna to deal the killing strike, Atris swiped at Malus with her saber, but Malus blocked. Atris had to fight Malus alone, for Brianna was knocked out cold. Atris evaded many of Malus' attacks which caused her to jump away from the duel. Malus saw this as an oppurtunity to kill Brianna. Malus was about to kill Brianna but Atris attacked him again. Malus had enough of fighting Atris so he used the Force to pull her saber away and began to advance towards her. Brianna woke up and attacked Malus. Malus sliced her saber and made it unusable and tried to kill Brianna. Atris attempted to tackle Malus but Malus caught her by the neck. "ATRIS!" Brianna cried. Malus could feel Atris gulping, waiting for her death. Brianna tried to save her but stopped in her tracks as she saw a saber right before her face, and Atris not far ahead. Malus dropped Atris on the ground and began laughing.

"I think I'll have her corpse hang from the entrance to my acadamy. Or maybe stick her head on a pike." he cackaled.

Brianna now had to fight Malus alone, and to make matters worse, without a saber. Brianna dropped into the Echani stance known as Kenpo. Malus had his doublesaber and Atris' saber circling him. Little did Malus know, Brianna was more skilled in hand to hand than saber combat. Brianna fought gracefully against Malus, who only landed blows using his elbows and legs. Malus landed a swipe on her leg, but it wasn't severed. Brianna merely tore the cut legging off. Brianna fought Malus hard enough until he was in the hangar. Brianna backflipped out of it. She waved her hand and a ray shield appeared between them. Malus looked back to see the blackness of space. Brianna waved her hand again and that shield dissapeared. Brianna took her ship and Atris' dead body. Telos had been defended, but at the cost of Atris' life.


(I'm very sorry I took too long. And I might've lost some of my spunk in my absence)

Well, it could have been better but it still was good. Atris's death was emotional, and she never got the chance to tell Brianna.

Short, but good. Atris has finally proven herself to the light side by sacrificing herself. Well done, though I hope the next Chapters are longer.

Well I admit I might've lost some of my skill due to the delay. But I'll get better.

Brianna landed back in the hangar, she was greeted by Revan and Bastila "Brianna, how did the mission go?" asked Bastila. Both Revan and Bastila knew it couldn't be good when they saw tears down her eyes. Both Revan and Bastila gasped when Brianna pulled Atris' dead body from the ship. Brianna didn't say a word, she just walked by, crying. "What happened?" asked Jaden running into the hangar.

"Telos' defence was a success, but at a terrible price." told Revan.

"Why what happened?"

"Atris died."

"By the force, that's terrible news. There will be a time to grieve over Atris, but it is not now. Canderous sent us a transmission that The Sith attempted to take Dxun, but the Mandalorians drove them off. So The Sith took Onderon and are coming back to Dxun for another round."

"Bastila and I shall take back Onderon."

"Then Visas and I shall defend Dxun. But who will take the Ebon Hawk?"

"Bastila and I shall take the Ebon Hawk, but Correlian engineers have donated us a top of the line freighter. Great blockade runner and has many compartments for storage and hiding."

"Does it have a name?"

"They're calling it: The Millenium Falcon."

"Okay, Visas and I shall take that ship."


The Hawk and The Falcon flew off to Onderon. The hyperdrives were very fast, but the Falcon's could not surpass the Hawk's. Revan and Bastila flew down to Onderon, and the Millenuim Falcon had to run the Dxun blockade. Jaden ran to the turbo-lazers to fend off all the ships that attacked them. Visas' Force Sight was effective enough to land them on Dxun, with the Falcon taking minimum damage. Jaden and Visas ran down the loading ramp to help the defence of Canderous' camp.

Jaden and Visas entered Canderous' camp to be attacked by Sith. Jaden and Visas cut them down and went to find Canderous. They found him fending off Sith from the main base. They helped him finish the job. "Well you came in time." told Canderous.

"Us Jedi aim to please." replied Jaden.

"Where's Revan?"

"I sense he just landed on Onderon." told Visas.

"Then we'll have to help him." ordered Jaden.

"Getting to your ship will take a long time. We'll take a basilisk war droid."


On Onderon, The Sith were waiting for Revan and Bastila and were well perpared. When they landed, they boarded the Ebon Hawk. "Drop your lightsabers!" ordered a Sith, putting a blaster to Bastila's head. They wouldn't do anything. "Drop them now or her brain has somewhere to breath. All of a sudden, the blaster flew right out of the trooper's hand and it shot the trooper who threatened Bastila and the other two on the ship. The blaster lowered into Bastila's hand. "So uncivilized." she said as she threw it down.

Revan and Bastila stepped outside and fought off the Sith around the Ebon Hawk. Suddenly, a Basilisk War Droid landed right beside the Ebon Hawk, and out walked Jaden, Visas and Canderous. "It took you long enough." joked Bastila.

Canderous glared at Bastila, taking the joke seroiusly "Well we're sorry you washed up piece of-"

"Bastila- Canderous! We don't have to re-live the quest for the Star Forge." said Revan trying to calm the two down "We have to fight our way to the royal palace."

"Then I suggest we move on." told Bastila.

"Hmph. I think we're already re-living the quest for the Star Forge." mumbled Canderous, recognizing Bastila's line.

"I'll lead the way, I've been here before." suggested Jaden.

"Then lets move." told Revan.

Jaden led the way to the royal palace, he remembered the route that he and Kreia took to the palace. "The Jedi is back!" yelled a rebellion captain.

"Jaden Page, has come to help my cousin again." observed the leader "Who is that with them?"

Ajunta came walking out to see what was going on "I recognize that battle mask." he told "It is Revan."

"The Revan who led the Republic to victory in the Mandalorian wars and almost extinguished the Sith?" asked the leader.

"Yes, General." replied Ajunta.

"Send everything we've got. If we need a whole army to take out someone as powerful as Revan, then we will need a whole army." ordered the General.

Sith and rebellion troops were sent to defeat Revan, but they were of no concequence. Revan and his company cut them down as if they were children with sticks. "Lock the door, and kill Talia." ordered the General "Tell her, if I don't make it: Vaklu sends his regards." Revan and the others still fought their way to the palace. But before they could enter the throne room, the door shut right in front of them. "Damnit! We'll have to go the long way." told Jaden.

"I came prepared for this kind of situation." said Canderous, pulling out a sachel charge. He set it on the wall and everyone stepped back.

"How long did you set it for?" asked Revan.

"One minute, but I'm gonna accelerate it." told Canderous raising his repeater. He shot at the charge and it exploded violently, and the door pieces flew straight in Vaklu's direction, killing half of his troops.

Revan, Bastila, Jaden, Visas and Canderous walked into the throne room. Revan used the Force to push Vaklu away from Talia, he then freed her from her cuffs. Revan threw her a lightsaber "Do you know how to use one of those?" he asked.

Talia found the switch and turned the blade on "Yes." She replied. Talia attacked Vaklu and cut him down quick, due to her superior skill to close quarters combat. Jaden, Visas and Canderous began to eliminate the rest of Vaklu's troops. Revan and Bastila began circling Ajunta. "I thought you gave up the dark side." told Revan.

"I realized I wanted my blade back." he replied.

"But at a terrible price, I see." told Bastila "You are a wraith of darkness."

"Ajunta, if you give up on Malus and fight for us, I can release you from this living death. Whatever Malus promised you, you wont get it. He lied to you." told Revan.

"You waste your time, Revan." said Canderous now pointing his repeater at Ajunta "He had no honour in life, he has none now in death."

"Ajunta, let me redeem you again." told Revan "And I will let you rest as a Jedi... What do you say?"

Ajunta dissapeared. "The important thing is, that you are to be commended for the defence of the people of Onderon." told Talia.

"Thank you." replied Jaden.

"Here is your lightsaber back, Revan."

Revan took his lightsaber back and bowed. Everyone walked outside, Ajunta re-appeared. "You have time to attack Korriban, Malus is there." Ajunta explained. Revan raised his hand, Ajunta didn't feel different but Revan did something. "I did not know what you did to me, but I will only fight for you when your need is more than dire." Ajunta dissapeared.

"Well at least Malus has no grip on him anymore." said Revan smiling.

Good Chapter, but still quite short. What happened to your old Avatar? Is this new one another Led Zepelin one?

Like I said, I'm not done the chapter yet and yes this is Jimmy Page playing Dazed And Confused.

Edit: Nooooooow I'm done

Good chapter, only a little error. It said Revan had landed on Dxun when he had landed on Onderon, but the rest is fine. :)

"Where to now?" asked Bastila.

"You are going with Jaden and Visas back to Coruscant, I am going to Korriban." told Revan.

"Why can't I come with you?"

"Because I am going to flush out the Sith there."

"Baby, please don't go. I don't want to lose you to the Dark Side."

Revan clasped Bastila's hand "We shall see this war over. I garuntee you will be alive to see it."

"Why can't you garuntee yourself."

Revan didn't answer.

"Promise to me that you'll never die."

"You know I can't promise that. I need you at the Jedi Temple. For long you will defend Coruscant if the battle goes to hell."

"What else would you have me do?"

"If I die, I need you to lead the Republic and the Jedi to a golden age."

"Kiss me." told Bastila "Just incase it's our last." Revan and Bastila began a deep kiss. "I love you." told Bastila.

"I loved you all my life."

"I forgive you."

"Forgive me for what?" asked Revan.

"For being away for far too long."

"I kept dreaming that you'll be with me and you'll never go."

"I'll stop breathing if I don't see you anymore."

Revan broke away from Bastila and boarded the Ebon Hawk. Revan set a course for Korriban. It will be his fifth visit. Revan entered and exited hyperspace and came close to Korriban. Malus, who was meditating in the tomb of his grandfather, sensed Revan. And ordered for soldiers to wait for him past the Czerka ourpost. "Welcome to Korriban, spacer. I'm going to have to ask for the landing fee."

"Do I really have to pay the landing fee?" asked Revan.

"Actually, your aquaintences say you don't have to pay. They say you won't live to enjoy it's values."

Revan sighed for he knew who is "aquantences" were "They never learn." he said to himself. He used the Force to open the door, just to be safe. Many Sith ignited their red blades. Revan put on his battle mask and ignited his blue sabers. Some Sith turned off their sabers and fled, now that they got a very small glimpse of who they were dealing with. The Sith who were "stupid" enough to fight Revan died very quickly. One by one, Revan struck down the Sith who tried to stop him from getting to their master.

In the meditation chamber a familiar face met Malus who he has not seen in a very long time. Malus ignited his saber for he rembembered the person's past cowardice. "Wait, my master!" begged the Muun.

Malus put away his saber "You offer your aligience to me?"

"Yes, master. I will not cower again."

"How can I trust you?"

"You can. I, Darth Plagueis will fight for you again."

Malus thought for a moment "Then you will fight away from me at the moment. Attack Coruscant, when I am finished with Revan, I will join you."

"I have gathered a large army in the Unknown Regions, who reside in a different galaxy. They call themselves: The Yusaan Vong."

"Why are you still here?" asked Malus. Plagueis caught his drift.

Revan now fought his way to the outside of the acadamy, the guards were of no consequence. He opened the doors which were hard to open, invulnerable to sabers and strong against the Force. This only demonstrated a fraction of Revan's power. Revan entered the acadamy and still the students and guards couldn't bring him down. In the main training chamber, Revan was surrounded. "You are all going to fall to the ground and die before you get up." intimidated Revan in a hoarse tone of voice, could he be falling to the Dark Side? Revan jumped in the air and struck his sabers into the ground letting out a huge shockwave. Everyone fell down, just as Revan said. In the blink of an eye, guards and students fell down farther. In twenty-five short blinks, Revan was surrounded by corpses. Malus stepped over them. "Very good, you have utilized your dark powers and slowly are becoming your true self again." commented Malus.

"Before I kill you, tell me, was it you who told the Mandalorians to go to war against the Republic?" asked Revan.

"I started the war, I made the Star Maps more visible for you to find, and I am about to kill you and then kill your darling wife." taunted Malus.

Malus ignited his doublesaber and they both clashed in a fierce duel. Revan and Malus were equally well in saber fighting, it was all a matter of Force use. Revan shoved Malus away and pushed him towards a crumbling wall. Only small pebbles hit Malus on the head, but a large rock crushed his saber and nearly his hand. "No matter, I will show you how I fixed your ridicule on me." Malus finally removed his cloak, revealing an entire metal arm, but with no hand. The arm extended a little bit and split apart and revealed a three slots. Red blades ignited out of all the slots. Malus lunged at Revan, now gaining an upper hand in the fight. Revan fought bravely and with extreme agility, he even was jumping to and off walls to avoid Malus. Revan and Malus entered a saber lock, as Revan began to falter, Malus noticed his eyes slowly turning yellow. "Good, good, you will kill me, then your friends and the Sith shall rule." taunted Malus. Revan punced Malus in the face, and the blades turned off, for they were controlled by nerves, and by that punch, Revan somehow disrupted its functionallity. Revan raised his sabers and was going to deal the killing blow. "Do it, kill me." ordered Malus.

Revan hesitated. Then turned off his sabers, his eyes went back to their brown colour and he sent a rock to crush Malus' organic arm. "I will kill you. But not in cold blood." Revan ran off and flew back to Coruscant as quickly as he could, for Plagueis was nearly there.


(I tried on multiple occasions to get this up, but I have one thing to say for it's delay: Damn school)

(I tried on multiple occasions to get this up, but I have one thing to say for it's delay: Damn school)

Same here with my Fics. Anyway, good Chapter and I'm looking foward to the next Chapter.

You mean the end chapter, which I'll try to get soon, before school hinders me again.

Bastila looked out of the window out of the Jedi Council chamber. She could see Plagueis' army marching forth. Bastila had everyone stationed at the front entrance to await the coming of thier fate. I won't let you down my love. Bastila thought to herself as she saw the army getting closer. Bastila and the rest of the Jedi marched to the front lines to be the first to enter the fray of the last stand. As the defending army could her the footsteps of the opposing army, they began to back away in fear. But they stopped when they heard a "HOLD YOUR GROUND! Hold your ground." It was Revan. Revan ran to the front lines to lead the army. He turned around "I see in your eyes... the same fear that would take the heart of me. A day may come, when the courage of the Republic fails. When we forsake our friends and break all bonds of love, but it is not this day. Shall it be an hour of blood? Before the age on the Republic comes crashing down, but it is not this day. This day we fight. By all that you hold dear, in these good stars, I bid you stand. Heros of the Galaxy." told Revan with his inspiring speech. All the soldiers raised their guns and cheered. No one left the front entrance. The Sith army stationed themselves, waiting for the Republic to make the first strike. "I thought I'd die fighting side by side with an exile." Vrook said to himself.

"What about side by side with a friend?" asked Jaden, hearing him.

"Yes, I will do that." replied Vrook, finally admitting to calling Jaden, his friend.

"I shall honor them with battle." told Brianna.

"They're asking for it." said Carth.

"Who dies first?" asked Canderous.

"This is it, Big-Z." whispered Mission.

"Your comfort is good." roared Zalbaar.

"A weakness is revealed." said Visas Page.

"I will fight with you till death." told Bastila.

"We will make it." vowed Revan "We will."

Revan stepped forward. He turned to Bastila "I love you he said." and he ran off to fight. Bastila ran after him "THE FORCE FIGHTS WITH US!" she cried. Everyone else ran after them. Revan got he first kill on the Yusaan Vong. Revan cut down anyone who attacked him. Force immunes were are no match for his saber combat. A Sith Lord attempted to assassinate Bastila from behind, but Revan pulled her to him and threw his sabers into the Sith Lord's eyes. Revan quickly kissed Bastila before pulling his sabers out of the Sith's face. The ghosts of the Sith entered the battlefield and started killing one by one. Luyoni Skywalker attempted to kill Revan, but he was blocked. By Tudo'Val Skywalker. He was assisted by a now proper Sion, and Ajunta. The power of the light began to become too much for the forces of darkness. Some Sith attempted to flee but, they returned. Not out of rememberence, but out of some fear. Malus had come to the battle. Malus started killing all in his path, until he was stopped by Revan and Bastila. He entered a duel with them and fought with great talent. Malus was a good fighter, but he was no match for the combined power of the Skywalker family. Revan brougt him on his knees again. "You won't kill me, you don't have the guts" told Malus.

"Your're right." replied Revan "Canderous, shoot this piece of-"

"I get it." told Canderous, moments before he put Malus to the blaster. Plagueis and many soldiers witnessed this deed and fled the battle field, only to be intercepted by re-inforcements. Revan found Bastila. "We have won." she said "They've been defeated." Revan entered a kiss with Bastila. It was long. But Revan noticed something he did not expect. He tasted blood. Bastila had coughed up blood but how? When Revan broke away from her, he found blood on both their robes. Bastila fell on the ground, no sign of life whatsoever. Revan inhaled deeply with an open mouth. "I have taken who you love." said Luyoni Skywalker, the first Sith Lord "She is gone. Malus is no more, but I still remain in this temple, you fool. Now I will finish what I began here, a year ago."

"Or I shall finish what I should've done." told Revan. Revan entered what would be the most intensive duel of his life, fighting against his Sith ancestry. Revan slashed and swung at Luyoni with everything he had. Luyoni blocked and laughed. Luyoni was a Sith ghost so he was better than Revan in everyway. But somehow Revan's skills began getting better, he was getting closert to landing some hits, he countered Luyoni's Force attacks. How was this possible? "How is this possible?" asked Luyoni.

"It's the power of love." told Revan.

"Impossible, I killed her."

Revan didn't answer as he quickly glanced over at Bastila who was glowing. Revan circulated Luyoni's pike a couple times until he lost his grip. Revan raised his hands, and Luyoni started feeling weird. Luyoni started dissapearing like dust.

"What are you doing?" panicked Luyoni "Stop this now."

Revan didn't answer and continued to cut him off from the Force. With some final screams, Luyoni was no more. Revan rushed over to Bastila and lifted her up. "Bastila, this can't be." He whimpered. All the Jedi gathered around him. They shut their eyes. And Bastila's slowly opened as her stab wound to the lung healed. "You've given us much, Revan." told Jaden.

"Our turn." told Vrook.

"I thought I lost you." told Revan smiling.

"I used what energy I had left in my battle meditation. I think I died shortly after." said Bastila.

"Forget that, you're alive, that's all that matters." replied Revan.


One year later, and Revan and Bastila spent much time together. Revan saw to Bastila who was sitting on the bed one day. "How much longer?" he asked.

"Not long now."

"He or she will become a great Jedi someday, I know it... Zhar."

"Named it already?" asked Bastila.

"Yeah. Let's call it Zhar."






Written By Revanscool. Hardcore Led Zeppelin/KotOR/Hockey fan.

*claps hands like heck and whistles* Great chapter, i actually visioned the fight between Luyoni and Revan as the Battle of Heroes! :xp: And the ending makes it possible for a sequel. Anyways, great chapters, and continue writing.

It's all done now. I wanted to get it done quickly so school or hockey wouldn't hinder me. Now I can work on my other fic.

How can I say? a good novel. Well, I don't know if Lucas Arts will publish another KOTOR, named after your novel.

Welcome to the Forums, john_ctg. Feel free to read Revanscool's other Fic, The Beginning of the Galactic Empire or feel free to read anyone elses. Mine for example. Anyway I agree with you. I doubt that KOTOR III would be called The Second Sith War.

To Pottsie:

Thanks for your warm welcome. I just read the Beginning of the Galactic Empire, it's way good for front part and middle part, but a little loose on the end. It gives me a feeling that it's not finished (No offense here, just my opinion.)

Sure, I will read yours...If I have time...Guaranteed.

Oh, I almost forgot to mention that can the fiction a little more realistic? I don't think Revan and Bastila can handle Freedon Nadd, Ajunta Pall, Tulak Hord, Marko Ragnos, and Naga Sadow, or can they? At least not in the game. One of them is very tough because they're ancient Sith Lords. Of course, unless you type in the cheat codes...That's possible. LOL. Just joking.

"sigh" I slacked off on this story than stopped reading it:( bad idea it was, great 1-11 chaps thats what ive read so far but plan to finish it soon :D:D:D but any way good fic

So bastila Skywalker now isnt it:D

@ john_ctg: Thanks and I hope you have a great time on the Forums.

To be honest, I think that this has been Revanscool's best Fic so far. I rate:

1. KOTOR III: The Second Sith War

2. The Beginning of the Galactic Empire

3. The Threads of an Old Order

Threads of an Old Order is rated last, because I don't know much about it yet and I doubt that The Second Sith War can be beaten as Revanscool's best Fic.

@ connor: Yes it is.

@ john_ctg: Thanks and I hope you have a great time on the Forums.

To be honest, I think that this has been Revanscool's best Fic so far. I rate:

1. KOTOR III: The Second Sith War

2. The Beginning of the Galactic Empire

3. The Threads of an Old Order

Threads of an Old Order is rated last, because I don't know much about it yet and I doubt that The Second Sith War can be beaten as Revanscool's best Fic.

@ connor: Yes it is.

Well I just got confused: how many KOTOR III out there? At least I saw 3 versions, one revanscool, one yours, and another one is also yours.

But however, keep up...

John_Ctg, think like this. They probably got weakened by the centuries they were dead, and then, they just resurrected in Force Spectres, so naturally, they lost some of their power.

OK...Got it. Thanks, Jason.

Good Fic I have finished it,.... Finnally
Ps Good Fic again:D:D:D

Hi everyone, this will be my new fanfic after I'm finished with The Beginning of The Galactic Empire. It's about Revan's return to the Republic only to find the Jedi Order in tatters and to help rebuild it into the next great war. For starters, I'll write you the opening text crawl.



Star Wars



Knights of the Old Republic III: The Second Sith War


Mandalorian War Hero: Revan Skywalker has returned from the Unknown Regions in his search for the Sith. He decides to put it on hold and return to Coruscant to see Bastila Shan again. But he returns to see an empty temple, Revan then realizes that he and the Jedi Exile and Bastila must rebuild the Order if the Republic is to survive the events set in motion. For the Sith are waiting for the oppurtune striking moment.
Hello Jimmy I read your Story of KOTOR 3 and to say the Least The Jedi Masters did Die in part two Lord of the sith But I am going to give you a little advice Can Bastila and Revan stop kissing so much can we get a little more action and I was hoping in time Bastila ends up pregnant just hopeful thinking And I thought it was cool Revan is such a Romantic but what if your Character is a female Does she marry Carth Onasi and I see you have made Revan A Skywalker is he Related to Luke Skywalker and Breanna is Handmaiden right I never knew that but hey very nicely written it be nice if Revan Falls to the Darkside again hehe I guess I just Like playing the Darkside of it all
Very nice work by the way

DarthRevan73, welcome to the Forums.

I'll fix it in the final cut
ok if Revan is a jedi wheres Zaalbar and Mission and Canderous so far ive read i havent seen these three yet hope you put them in if you havent already done so

ok if Revan is a jedi wheres Zaalbar and Mission and Canderous so far ive read i havent seen these three yet hope you put them in if you havent already done so

Read this Fic carefully and Canderous is in some scenes. Also, you haven't made much of a big deal with other Characters, so why Mission and Zaalbar?

Thank you but i think it was you wrote the dark version of Revan and jaden Very Very nice work

I think its cause Sion Hated Kreia but its just my opinion

well im kinda behind here but i was kinda hoping Mission and Dustil get together besides Mission is pretty cute even for a Tri'lek but its up to you i just joined a few days ago and pottsie thanks

Please use the edit link if you'd like to add more thoughts to a post--if you have any questions on that, please feel free to PM me.
Welcome to LF, too! --Jae

First off, welcome to the forums DarthRevan73.

And about that, i wouldn't mind, but i would have prefered Dustil and Brianna.

First off, welcome to the forums DarthRevan73.
And about that, i wouldn't mind, but i would have prefered Dustil and Brianna.
Jason I've heard that the Dustil/Mission paring is very popular and I don't want to see Brianna with anyone else, but the Exile. Also DarthRevan73, Tri'lek is spelled Twi'lek.

I wouldnt mind it either Jason besides Dustil is a Hottie so is Breanna i didnt know the Handmaiden had a name til reading this i remember when played I couldnt Persuade her enough to tell me her name but of course im physically a female so that might made lots of sense i really wanted jaden and Breanna together


Thank you Pottsie for correcting me I think your my hero *smiles* but i think they would gone good together

Hello i love this story men it taked me with it becuse i think Kotor was 1 of the best games because of story and lovestory:p

Hello i love this story men it taked me with it becuse i think Kotor was 1 of the best games because of story and lovestory:p

Welcome to the Forums DarthSnake. Is it just me or do all the newbies like to come here?

Maybe they just love to read the fi stories hun an imagination of a persons mind can take them to a wonderous place ANd I havent seen anyone rude lol

WOW. This is probably the best fic i've read. Great job.

Is it just me or do all the newbies like to come here?

No, it isn't you Potts, it's very simple actually. It's because it is KOTOR III.

Well I'm glad you all like it. Sorry I haven't posted in a very long while.

Hi I'm new.. But I thought this fic ROCKED!!!! Although I would've done a Bianna/Dustil or Brianna/Mical relationship. Anyway great work

Hi I'm new.. But I thought this fic ROCKED!!!! Although I would've done a Bianna/Dustil or Brianna/Mical relationship. Anyway great work

Welcome to the Forums DarthDani23. I thought the Fic was good too, juding by the fact of how many posts I have in this one Thread. But like all great Fics, it needs work on. Personally this is my favourite of Master Jimmy's Fics.

Lol, yeah, welcome to the forums DarthDani. It really seems newbies are mainly interested in K3 fics. And i agree with Pottsie, this was is best.